Tow Re-Write

http://travel.nytimes.com/2013/01/06/travel/36-hours-in-philadelphia.html?_r=1&

Philadelphia, a bustling city with numerous shops and restaurants, has seen some eye opening changes in the past decade. The city has added world class museums, contains one of the best colleges in the world, and has new cultural energy. An event called 36 Hours took place in Philadelphia on Friday at 3 PM and ended on Sunday at 12 PM. The event consisted of attending exotic restaurants, a museum, and many places traditional just to Philadelphia.

The purpose of this article, by Freda Moon, was to inform readers of the event in hopes that the word would get out there and more people would attend. The audience of this article is adults who would enjoy attending this day-and-a-half event. The event started on January 4th and this article was published on January 3rd, so the exigence was that the event was coming up and people needed to be aware of the festivities.

The main rhetorical device used in this article was structure. Instead of writing the schedule of events in paragraph form, Freda Moon structured the article in chronological order. She would write, for example, Friday 3 PM 1. Start At The Beginning. Then under that heading she would explain the event and tell readers what they would be doing there. She did this all throughout the article up until the very last event. This technique was very effective in letting the reader truly see their itinerary for the event. In addition, Moon uses the rhetorical devices tone and mood in her article. The tone she uses throughout the article is one of enthusiasm. She speaks positively about every tour spot and lists the positives one gains from going to that historical store, restaurant, or museum. For example, she writes that Frankford Hall is "family-friendly, with Ping-Pong and picnic tables, an affinity for wood block games and an excellent beer list." This little addition creates a sense of excitement and anticipation in the readers. Knowing all the interesting and different things each tour spot has to offer allows them to get excited about going their and attending the event overall. Lastly, Freda Moon uses pictures to achieve and pathological appeal to her readers. She includes several pictures in her article that make the places that people will be going especially interesting. Freda includes a picture of food from the restaurants that people will be eating at, which makes the restaurants look especially appealing. Also, she includes pictures of museums, shops, and other historical spots with people walking around and truly enjoying themselves. This not only makes Philadelphia look like an intriguing city, but also convinces readers that they will truly enjoy their 36 Hours in Philadelphia tour experience. 

Overall, I do believe that Freda Moon achieved her goal. Using rhetorical devices, such as tone and mood, she makes the event seem like an interesting and exciting thing to take part of. The pictures she includes also contributes to the excitement the reader feels as it makes each tour spot look interesting and appealing. After reading this article, the reader is definitely left wanting to attend something so special.

The Color of Water

       As I said in my previous blog post, The Color of Water by James McBride is his autobiography and a way for him to give tribute to his mother. James is one of twelve children and grew up in Brooklyn's Red Hook projects. Despite the fact the James and his siblings were living in dirt poor conditions and his mother was raising twelve children on her own, all the siblings felt equally loved and had great childhood experiences. His mom emphasized education and instilled the meaning of the word in them ever since they could hear. Although they lived a very challenged life, James' mother Ruth was able to put all of her kids through college and was able to watch them change the course of their lives.
        The purpose of James McBride writing this story is to pay tribute to his determined and eccentric mother. James recognizes the rare breed his mother is, and he wants to let her know he appreciates the mother she was. This book is geared towards an audience of teenagers to late adults. They would be the age group that would best be able to grasp the impacting information this story has to offer.
        Thus far, James McBride writes with great use of diction. For example, James writes words like "comin', Ma, ol', ain't, fixin', and 'nuff" throughout his story. Although these words are improper English and are deemed slang, they give the reader great insight into how James and his family talked when he was a child. To be grammatically correct he could right "enough" instead of "'nuff", but then James' writing would loose its flare.
        James McBride also utilizes description throughout his book to get his point across. For example, James uses half of a page just to describe his sister Helen. He told the reader what she wore, how she wore it, what she stood for in life, and more about her character as a person and a sibling. Although this may seem a little boring to the reader, it actually is an effective tool because the reader can personalize with Helen. We feel as though we know her through the authors description even though we have never talked to or met her in our entire lives. He also uses description often to describe things that people may not be able to relate to, such as their shock toaster or living situation. This is a great way to get the reader intrigued and to make them feel like a part of his life.
      He has absolutely conquered his goal through the first ten chapters. As I read this book, I can almost feel the internal struggle James is going through to find himself. He is both white and black which was very uncommon in the 1960's. All of his older siblings have chosen to indulge into the civil rights movement and fight for black rights, however James does not know what he wants to do. As I turn the pages I can also sympathize with Ruth as she is trying to raise twelve children with high moral and ethical values by herself.  

36 Hours in Philadelphia

http://travel.nytimes.com/2013/01/06/travel/36-hours-in-philadelphia.html?_r=0

Philadelphia, a bustling city with numerous shops and restaurants, has seen some eye opening changes in the past decade. The city has added world class museums, contains one of the best colleges in the world, and has new cultural energy. An event called 36 Hours took place in Philadelphia on Friday at 3 PM and ended on Sunday at 12 PM. The event consisted of attending exotic restaurants, a museum, and many places traditional just to Philadelphia.

The purpose of this article, by Freda Moon, was to inform readers of the event in hopes that the word would get out there and more people would attend. The audience of this article is adults who would enjoy attending this day and a half event. Te event started on January 4th and this article was published on January 3rd, so the exigence was that the event was coming up and people needed to be aware of the festivities.

The main rhetorical device used in this article was structure. Instead of writing the schedule of events in paragraph form, Freda Moon structured the article in chronological order. She would write, for example, Friday 3 PM 1. Start At The Beginning. Then under that heading she would explain the event and tell readers what they would be doing there. She did this all throughout the article up until the very last event. This technique was very effective in letting the reader truly see their itinerary for the event.

Yes, Freda Moon did achieve her goal. She made the event seem like an interesting and exciting thing to take part of. After reading this article, the reader is left wanting to attend something so special.